holland landing jan. 1. 10
blue new year’s eve moon
freshly covered vines of snow
dancing, chanting, be (ing)
-lauren corindia
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Gorgeous!
Just one suggestion — a personal one, adverbs were drummed out of my poems by numerous teachers — say “fresh” instead of “freshly..” Don’t worry about the syllables — if you read much contemporary English haiku, the 5-7-5 thing is only loosely followed…
Miriam